English help - 10 lines

Question

Hi guys. Can you do me a favor? I need this 10

lines in good english. Sadly my english ist perfect. Would be nice if you have 2 min for me and have an eye on it and correct whats is wrong. thank you

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In School he played professional baseball in the Austrakian NLB, witch is second pro league of Australia. His interest in Stocks dates back to school days and he started investing and working in this sector early. In 2012, he sold most of his companies and started working in the media. He started a show and ran a podcast on the new media platforms. Paul worked with People like Peter, Ulrich, Gerhart and his Friend the Comdidian Christoph. His show and podcasts has been seen by over 10 Million people right now.[Paul lifes in the USA, Israel and Switzerland. In 2020 he also works in the parliament as strategic consultant.

Paul has also played some Poker Tournaments. Acording to the "All Time Money List" of Australia, he is one of the 100 most successful Players of the Country.

In march 2020 Paul drove a world record on the new Harley Softail. He drove over 1000 Miles within 24 hours with the Harley. The ride goes trough 4 Countries (Austria, Liechtenstein, Switzerland and Germany) and had a huge global media attention. Over 20 Countries, from Indonesia, Bulgaria, Arabia, Czech Republic up to Germany, Spain, Canada and the USA reported about the record. The old record was under 1400km.

Answer 1

Hi Karl. I have reworked the paragraphs for you. In a tutoring session I would be able to go through the changes I've made. I have underlined information that you need to change. I hope this is helpful!

Best wishes,

Rebecca Cramer

He played professional baseball in school for the Australian NLB (what does this stand for? You need to spell it out the first time you introduce something), the second (WHAT? “second highest ranking”, “second best”?) pro-league of Australia. His interest in the stock market began back in his school days when he started investing and working in the sector.

In 2012, he sold most of his companies and started working in the Media. He began filming  a show (put the the name of that show here), and a podcast. Paul worked with people like Peter (last name here?), Ulrich (last name here?), Gerhart (last name here?) and his (Paul’s or Gerhart’s) friend the comedian Christoph (last name here?). His (Paul, or Christoph?) show and podcasts have been viewed by over 10 Million people! Paul’s life in the USA, Israel and Switzerland (Do you mean: Paul lives in the United States of America, Israel and Switzerland.). In 2020 he also worked as a Strategic Consultant for Parliament.

Paul has also played some poker tournaments; according to the "All Time Money List" of Australia, he is one of the 100 most successful players in the country.

In March 2020, Paul set a World Record driving over 1000 Miles within 24 hours with the on the new Harley Davidson Softail. The previous record was under 1400km. The ride travels through the countries of Austria, Liechtenstein, Switzerland, and Germany, and has a huge global media following. Over 20 countries, from places like Indonesia, Bulgaria, Saudi Arabia, the Czech Republic, Germany, Spain, Canada and the United States, all reported the record.