
Kristen L. answered 07/30/19
Passionate English Tutor Specializing in College Preparation
This doesn't sound natural because a word is missing and it is not complete. For example:
‘It is unlikely that someone, who took his car, while presumed innocent, will get bail any time soon’
or
‘It is highly unusual that someone, who took his brothers dog, while presumed innocent, will get bail any time soon’
The phrase "while presumed innocent" suggests negative contrast, so you need the beginning clause. Additionally, took his what? There needs to be something there.