How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect?

Question

I have written these two sentences: > Despite her temper, I loved her still.>> Or perhaps not despite; perhaps because of.The second sentence feels grammatically incorrect; how can I revise this to be less awkward-sounding yet still punchy? (The thought continues in the rest of the paragraph, explaining his feelings in more depth; this is the end of one paragraph and the beginning of another.)Edit: I came back to the paragraph to give context, decided I didn't like the way it flowed into the next sentence, and ended up changing it entirely: "Or perhaps not despite; that would imply I saw it as a flaw." C'est la first editing pass.

Answer 1

How about: Despite her temper (or perhaps because of it?) I still loved her.

Answer 2

I have written these two sentences: > Despite her temper, I loved her still.>> Or perhaps not despite; perhaps because of.The second sentence feels grammatically incorrect; how can I... more

Try this:

Despite her temper, I loved her still (or perhaps not despite but because of).

Putting the second part in parentheses makes the sentence more interesting, original, and unified. The sentences are unique. Good work even though the second sentence is offically a fragment.