Xenia J. answered 02/21/18
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New to Wyzant
A couple tip:
Keep the words in the same tense. For example, either pick each word to be in the past (“were”), or the present (“protects”).
In each highly descriptive sentence you have, consider changing the order of some of the words to get the most clarity from them.
Shorter and longer sentences work well together to produce a tempo. Read outloud to yourself what you have written. If you stumble, consider changing that sentence or word order.