April D.

asked • 01/11/16

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1.  The girl chased me down in her car and almost cause me to have an accident. 
2.  Only four empty desk were available for the two test that were being proctored.  
3.  Ralph looked good zigzagging thru the streets.
4.  My last and final assignment was chores.  This one should be a piece of cake.
5.  A friend is only good to have at Wal-Mart when they stay by your side.

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1. caused not cause
2. desks not desk and tests not test
3. through not thru
4. exclamation point at the end (? not sure about this one as this is the only edit I can think of)
5. she stays not they stay
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I agree with all of Sherry S.'s suggested edits, and I'd just like to add that in sentence 5. many people would say the position of only is "wrong" because semantically it actually qualifies the time clause when they [sic] stay by your side (that is, that's the "only" time a friend is good to have at Walmart*). So to appease such critics, you should also recast the sentence as something like "A friend is good to have at Walmart only when they stay by your side."
 
Also, some people would object to using your if a specific reader or hearer is not being addressed; for general reference, "one" should use something like one's instead.
 
 
*I write the name without a hyphen because that seems to be the company's own practice now.
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