Which sentence would be more grammatically correct?

Question

"More light should be brung on to this issue because it is proven that schools over-discipline black students and that results in negative outcomes that will continue to be negative if we don’t do anything about it."

OR

"More light should be brung on to this issue because it is proven that schools over-discipline black students and it results in negative outcomes that will continue to be negative if we don’t do anything about it."

Answer 1

Corrected:

"More light should be brought onto this issue because it is proven that schools over-discipline black students, which may continue to result in negative outcomes unless we do something about it."

Answer 2

Hello Folo,

The first sentence is more grammatically correct since "that results" refers specifically to schools over-disciplining black students, whereas "it results" in the second sentence is more general and vague in its meaning.

However, in order to make either sentence 100% grammatically correct, "brung on to" needs to be changed to brought to. And, "is proven" needs to be changed to has been proven.

Answer 3

Neither of these sentences is grammatically correct, so let's take a different tack to get something

simple, clear, and correct.

Here's what I suggest:

More light should brought to this issue.

We know that schools frequently discipline black students excessively. This practice results only in negative outcomes that will persist until something is done about the situation.