Jasmine F.

asked • 02/21/15

Is this sentence written correctly?

This sentence is in my summary of a short story:
"Luke luckily picks ducks at a game-booth and wins Chuck's wife Margo a carnival prize before he dies shortly after in a car crash."
It sounds odd to me, and I would apprecate it so much if someone could tell me if my grammar is correct and help fix it. Thank you.

Solomon F.

Break it up into two sentences. You're killing me. 


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Comma before and after Margo


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