How to avoid using lot of I's in the personal essay?

Question

I am writing my statement of purpose for applying to grad school. When I read my statement of purpose I see a lot of "I"s: >I did this >I worked on this >I want to >I got to learn this >I got to work on that >I got to learn that >I did that I just realized I am so bad in writing. How do I avoid using lots of "I"s?

Answer 1

Hello Lakesha,

in order to avoid excessive use of the first person, you should instead try to use something called passive voice. in English, passive voice is when "it has been said" "that has been written" "this has had a great effect". Basically it is when you speak about something having been done without a specific subject as its doer, so to speak. Another thing you can do is try to switch perspectives; instead of writing "I have done this" you could say "This task has contributed to my life in such and such way" or "These assignments have bolstered my skill in ____ ways".

Answer 2

You can try reconstructing the sentence so that I is in the middle of the sentence rather than the beginning. If you have an example, I could help you.