
Ed M. answered 10/01/15
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A strategy that will help you improve some of these sentences is to avoid stringing together with and three or more verbs that have the same subject and instead connecting all but the last two (along with their associated objects and modifiers) with a comma. For example, sentence 1.:
The boy gobbled down the pancakes and drank his milk and went to his room to get ready for school. -->
The boy gobbled down the pancakes, drank his milk and went to his room to get ready for school. (Note: A so-called "Oxford comma" could be inserted after milk as well, but many authorities say such a comma is normally not necessary before and when it comes before the last item in series.)
Also, not an error in sentence structure, but in sentence 10. the subject of the first clause should be principal; I always remember the difference between principle and principal by thinking of the latter, a bit counter-factually and thus ironically, as your "pal."