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     In the novel, The Secret Life of Bees, by Sue Monk Kidd, Lily is the character whom has changed the most. First of all, Lily is the fundamental character, protagonist, and narrator of her story. At the point when Lily first shows up in the novel, she is a beaten down, misused, and abused by her brutal father. He runs a peach ranch where Lily has carried on with her entire life. However, inside of Lily are qualities she finds when she leaves home and goes on the run with her nanny, Rosaleen. Through her interactions with other individuals all through the novel, Lily gains strength in her independence, understanding of prejudice, and loving connections in her life. Basically, as Lily proceeds onward all throughout the novel, she feels and adjusts to changes in her diverse surroundings. Next, Zach and Lily were working on the supers that they brought in. They ran twelve extractor loads through the system. The whole time when Lily was working with Zach she thought about how difficult and mixed up people got when it came to love. Then she started thinking about her relationship with Zach. Kidd writes, “I myself, for instance. It seemed like I was now thinking of Zach forty minutes out of every hour, Zach, who was an impossibility. That’s what I told myself five hundred times: impossibility. I can tell you this much: the word is a great big log thrown on the fires of love.” (pg. 133). Basically, this shows that Lily is the character whom has changed the most in the novel. While driving with Zach in the honey truck, Lily sees that she loves him. In South Carolina, it was wrong to see a black and white person together, much less have them be in love. This makes Lily trust that her adoration for Zach is not right. Lily additionally feels that her affection for Zach is incomprehensible in view of her past encounters with love. Lily adores her dad T. Ray, yet does not feel that he cherishes her back due to his abusive ways. She craves for her mother's love, yet does not feel as though she loved her back. This shows that Lily is changing and acknowledging what is good and bad. It is not right for her to be infatuated with Zach because of the thoughts of those days when racism was an immense variable in essentially everything, except it is additionally wrong that both cannot be infatuated because of a contrast of race. Lily gets a handle on a greater amount of the idea that everybody is equal, as well as equally created, and comprehends that prejudice is a profoundly wrong conviction. In conclusion, Lily is the character whom has changed the most, in the novel, The Secret Life of Bees, by Sue Monk Kidd.

Answer 1

Too bad your "editor" missed several grammatical mistakes while attempting to "correct" you.  

Answer 2

 

Things like punctuation I have just corrected but actual text that I have altered I have bolded for clarity.

I have placed parentheses with and underlined any questions I had as I went along.

You should also make sure that your paper is double-spaced, with 1 inch margins on standard 8x11 paper in black, Times New Roman, 12pt font. Unless of course your teacher has given you other guidelines to follow.

The titles of novels are always typed with italics (in MLA format).

 

 

 

 In the novel, The Secret Life of Bees by Sue Monk Kidd, Lily is the character whom changes the most. To begin, Lily is the fundamental character, protagonist, and narrator of the story. At the point when Lily first shows up in the novel, she is a beaten down, misused, and abused by her brutal father. He runs the peach ranch where Lily has lived her entire life. However, inside of Lily are qualities she finds when she leaves home and goes on the run with her nanny, Rosaleen. Through her interactions with others individuals throughout the novel, Lily gains strength, in her independence, understanding of prejudice, and loving connections in her life. Basically, As Lily proceeds onward all throughout the novel, she feels and adjusts to the changes in her diverse (what do you mean by "diverse" here?) surroundings. Next, Zach and Lily were working on the supers (what do you mean by "supers"?) that they brought in. They ran twelve extractor loads through the system. The whole time when Lily was working with Zach she thought about how difficult and mixed up people became when it came to love. She then began thinking about her relationship with Zach. Kidd writes, “I myself, for instance. It seemed like I was now thinking of Zach forty minutes out of every hour, Zach, who was an impossibility. That’s what I told myself five hundred times: impossibility. I can tell you this much: the word is a great big log thrown on the fires of love.” (p. 133). While driving with Zach in the honey truck, Lily sees that she loves him. Basically, This shows that Lily is the character whom has changed the most in the novel. In South Carolina, it was wrong to see a black and white person together, much less have them be in a relationship with one another. This makes Lily believe that her adoration for Zach is wrong. Lily also feels that her affection for Zach is unbelievable in view of her past encounters with love. Lily adores her father, T. Ray, yet does not feel that he cherishes her back due to his abusive ways. She craves for her mother's love, yet does not feel as though she loves her back either. This also shows that Lily is changing and acknowledging what is good and bad. It is not right for her to be infatuated with Zach because of the thoughts of those days when racism was an immense variable in essentially everything. It is additionally a problem as they are both cannot be infatuated with each other but because they are of different races it is considered wrong by the society of the time. Lily eventually embraces the idea that everybody is equal, they are equally created. She regards prejudice as a profoundly wrong conviction. In conclusion, Lily is the character whom has changed the most, in the novel, The Secret Life of Bees, by Sue Monk Kidd.