What would your informal version of the following paragraph look like?

Question

In the beginning of his quest, Gansey receives help while Ender is left in isolation. Gansey reflects on the help he has received on his quest so far by thinking, "A museum curator in New Mexico had once told [me], Son, you have an uncanny knack for discovering oddities. An astonished Roman historian commented, You look under rocks no one else thinks to pick up, slick. And a very old British professor had said, The world turns its pockets out for you, boys,” (Stiefvater 24). Gansey has well-connected relationships around the world and each one tries to help him in some shape or form. Gansey has many close friends like Ronan Lynch, Noah Czerny and Adam Parrish. "Adam Parrish had been Gansey's friend for eighteen months, and he knew that certain things came along with that friendship," (Stiefvater 38). Gansey has never been alone or without aid ever since he started his epic quest four years ago. He has only been gaining help throughout it due to continuously gaining friends that each have special talents. Ender, however, has the unfortunate luck of being a third child. "Well, no one wants a Third anymore," (Card 22) so his entire existence has been loathed from the beginning since he is a Third. It causes him to be desolated as a young child. Ender’s own brother, Peter, despises him and instantly begins tormenting when his monitor is removed, "Now they aren't checking to see if you feel pain, listening to hear what I'm saying, seeing what I'm doing to you," (Card 10). Peter is an enemy of Ender from the start of the novel, causing Ender to feel abandoned without his monitor or family to protect him. The lack of aid makes Ender isolated while Gansey forges ahead with the help of his friends.

Answer 1

If you were to write an informal addition of this paragraph, think of it similar to writing a summary. Remember though, a summary references an original work. Your informal version would not be a reference to the formal version; it would be consider the original paragraph. You cover the main points the paragraph addresses without restating or changing the meaning. As you discuss the main points, make sure they follow the same order as the formal addition while leaving out the fillers. With informal writing, the addition of slang, contractions, and abbreviations can be used.

My version of the paragraph would cover the main points without all the filler. For example, in the first sentence, "In the beginning of his quest, Gansey receives help while Ender is left in isolation," I would remove the "filler" information at the beginning. Although it provides more information for the reader as to when it happened, it is not needed to make the point that Gansey received help while Ender was in isolation.