How do you change this informal paragraph to formal?

Question

Romeo and Juliet is a story about two people who fall in love. They are from two families who don’t like each other. The two sneak around and get married without their parents knowing. Family fighting gets worse and worse and then people Juliet and Romeo both love are killed. This makes it impossible for them to be a couple because Romeo is kicked out of the city they live in, Verona. Juliet tries a really impossible plan to fake her own death. Romeo thinks his wife is dead and comes back to Verona and kills himself before Juliet wakes up. She is so sad that she kills herself. The families become friends when they find out about their kids’ deaths

Answer 1

Usually informal writing uses slang terms, acronyms, abbreviations or language we use in speaking but not in writing. Informal writing may direct address the reader through using (or implying) the pronoun "you."

informal examples:

OMG, I gotta catch the bball game because Steph Curry is the GOAT and he'll be shooting those sick threes.

^ slang ^ abbreviation ^abbreviation ^slang/abbreviation ^slang

Romeo and Juliet makes you feel depressed because everyone in the story is so extra.

^doesn't identify play ^uses 2nd person ^slang

formal example:

The student wanted to stop work in time to watch her favorite player, the famous point guard Stephen Curry.

^third person (he/she/they) not first person (I/me/my) ^full name

Stephen Curry currently holds the record for most three-point shots made.

In the Shakespeare play Romeo and Juliet, the characters make extreme decisions quickly with tragic results which can affect readers' emotions negatively.

In the paragraph included, you may want to examine if you are using academic language--strong active verbs and specific nouns. You could also look at sentence fluency--how are you using each sentence to build an idea. The paragraph seems to be simply summarizing what happens in the play Romeo and Juliet. But was the assignment or intention to go beyond summarizing and answer a more specific question?

I recommend re-reading the prompt or assignment related to the play and then examine if this paragraph directly addresses that prompt using third person pronouns, avoiding slang, and creating sentences that link together to build an answer to the prompt.