How do you change this formal paragraph to informal?

Question

In the beginning of his quest, Gansey receives help while Ender is left in isolation. Gansey reflects on the help he has received on his quest so far by thinking, "A museum curator in New Mexico had once told [me], Son, you have an uncanny knack for discovering oddities. An astonished Roman historian commented, You look under rocks no one else thinks to pick up, slick. And a very old British professor had said, The world turns its pockets out for you, boys,” (Stiefvater 24). Gansey has well-connected relationships around the world and each one tries to help him in some shape or form. Gansey has many close friends like Ronan Lynch, Noah Czerny and Adam Parrish. "Adam Parrish had been Gansey's friend for eighteen months, and he knew that certain things came along with that friendship," (Stiefvater 38). Gansey has never been alone or without aid ever since he started his epic quest four years ago. He has only been gaining help throughout it due to continuously gaining friends that each have special talents. Ender, however, has the unfortunate luck of being a third child. "Well, no one wants a Third anymore," (Card 22) so his entire existence has been loathed from the beginning since he is a Third. It causes him to be desolated as a young child. Ender’s own brother, Peter, despises him and instantly begins tormenting when his monitor is removed, "Now they aren't checking to see if you feel pain, listening to hear what I'm saying, seeing what I'm doing to you," (Card 10). Peter is an enemy of Ender from the start of the novel, causing Ender to feel abandoned without his monitor or family to protect him. The lack of aid makes Ender isolated while Gansey forges ahead with the help of his friends.

Answer 1

Think of informal paragraphs as if you were talking casually to an acquaintance, family member or friend. You are still discussing the subject matter, but in a more casual way.

It uses first and second person pronouns (us, our, you), contractions (you're, we'll), and colloquialisms (in store for us, whatever's going on, totally).

Source: https://studentservices.op.ac.nz/activities/formal-and-informal-paragraphs/#:~:text=This%20paragraph%20is%20written%20in%20an%20informal%20way.&text=writing%20more%20academic.-,This%20paragraph%20is%20written%20in%20an%20informal%20way.,whatever's%20going%20on%2C%20totally).

So, if I were to start your paragraph and rewrite it informally, I would write it like this:

In reading (INSERT TITLE OF BOOK HERE), we learn that a very unlucky character, Ender, has life much harder than the entitled Gansey. We know that nothing but misery is in store for Ender, as he is merely a third child. Gansey will never suffer in the same way as Ender, simply for that reason. Our hearts sympathize with Ender because we cannot help how we are born into this world, whether that be as a first, second or third.

Hope this helps!