ENGLISH HELP PLS

Question

text Fireworks are beautiful; but as with many beautiful things, they are also dangerous. Misusing fireworks can result in property damage, injury, and even the loss of life. Such accidents usually happen for one of two reasons. The operators may be using poorly manufactured products, such as fireworks with fuses that burn too quickly. A defective firework can cause even the most skilled operator to have an accident. Other times, however, it is the operator who is at fault. The operator may be unskilled or distracted and make a mistake, such as setting up an explosion sequence improperly or not accounting for conditions in the environment, like soundproof foaming. For these reasons, even the most beautiful fireworks display can turn really ugly really quickly.

1) What other structure could be used to communicate the information in the above paragraph? Explain your answer.

Answer 1

You can improve the structure of your short essay paragraph by making sure that you have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. In this essay paragraph, you've got a fairly good introductory sentence, but the body of the paragraph has room for improvement, as does the concluding sentence. Remember that in an essay this short, every word and sentence counts, as does the order. Look at the following sentence:

Such accidents usually happen for one of two reasons.

This sentence actually works with the preceding sentences to clearly identify the thesis of the essay.

Now, read back over your paragraph. Have you clearly identified what the two reasons are? You can do this quickly and easily by including the reasons in that sentence. For example, "Such accidents usually happen for one of two reasons, defective fireworks or operator error." By including the reasons in that sentence, you provide greater clarity and organization to the remainder of the body of the paragraph.

Your conclusion should wrap up the essay and provide a reminder of the introduction, but your thesis is also something that needs to be addressed. Consequently the two-part nature of the reasons that fireworks are dangerous needs to be addressed in the conclusion.