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text Fireworks are beautiful; but as with many beautiful things, they are also dangerous. Misusing fireworks can result in property damage, injury, and even the loss of life. Such accidents usually happen for one of two reasons. The operators may be using poorly manufactured products, such as fireworks with fuses that burn too quickly. A defective firework can cause even the most skilled operator to have an accident. Other times, however, it is the operator who is at fault. The operator may be unskilled or distracted and make a mistake, such as setting up an explosion sequence improperly or not accounting for conditions in the environment, like soundproof foaming. For these reasons, even the most beautiful fireworks display can turn really ugly really quickly.

1) What other structure could be used to communicate the information in the above paragraph? Explain your answer.

text What’s that in the sky? Is it a bird? Is it a plane? No, it’s a firework! Fireworks capture the attention of crowds around the world, but how do they work? First, the firework is stuffed into a tube loaded with gunpowder. This is the mortar. Second, a fuse that leads to the mortar is lit. When the fuse ignites the gunpowder in the mortar, an explosion launches the firework into the air. A fuse on the firework is lit at the same time as the mortar fuse, but this fuse burns slower, allowing the firework to get into the air before it explodes. After it has risen to its peak, the firework should explode, causing tiny pieces of metal to burn in different colors as they scatter outward. Oooooh! 

2) How does the author's choice to structure the above paragraph impact your understanding of the message?

Answer 1

1) Another structure that could be used to communicate the information is separating the very long, run-on paragraph with multiple independent points into three paragraphs total. The first paragraph would be comprised of the statement that begins with the sentences that include "Fireworks are beautiful..one of two reasons." Then the author could conclude the first paragraph by giving the two examples of the the two reasons: firework manufacturing error and firework operator error. The second paragraph would explain manufacturing error, and the third paragraph would explain operator error. The separation of these three points clarifies and simplifies the information for easier consumption by the reader.

2) The author's structure of the paragraph allows the reader to visualize the complex science of the firework's functioning. The paragraph is structured in a time sequence of what the firework is doing. This organization, along with exclamations that are examples of what may progress through a reader's mind while watching a firework burn, aid in understanding the paragraph's message.