How to simplify a sentence so that a younger audience can understand it?

Question

I have the following sentence:> Pocket squares are a standout amongst the most vital apparatuses for a> man of style. It's important to have the correct pocket square for the> correct event.I feel the first sentence is a bit too advanced for the average reader. I am trying to see how to scale it down so that a 13-year-old boy could comprehend the sentence.

Answer 1

When simplifying the sentence, look first at any vocabulary that may need explanation. In devising an answer for your question, I looked up "pocket squares" and "apparatuses" just to make sure I had a clear understanding of the sentence myself. First of all, I'm not sure apparatuses is the best word to use as it is defined as being machinery or technical equipment. In my understanding, the sentence is about the decorative handkerchief that is often found in the pocket of a man's suit coat. Unless the purpose of this vocabulary is to creatively disguise the true meaning, there really is no reason to state it this way. A simpler version of the sentence might read as such: For a man of style, pocket squares can be a standout accessory. Or The perfect pocket square placed in a man's suit coat pocket is a vital part of creating a standout style.

Answer 2

Simply try to pear it down to common vernacular- just omit the flamboyant terms, and go to the point.

Try this: Pocket squares make a suit pop, and show a man's style on a personal level. Also, the pocket square can be a great way to stand out; just make sure you have the right square for the right event.