How to decide on which draft essay to pursue for personal statement?

Question

I have 2 essay drafts nd unable to decide which one will be more impactful for my personal statement

Answer 1

Personal statements are tricky--yes, you do want yours to stand out from the competition but at the same time, you do not want to place yourself so apart from the normal cohort. The beginning and the end are the most crucial. If you cannot craft an engaging beginning to hook your readers, you will be passed by. First impressions in writing and in public speaking determine if a reader or audience member is going to engage with you or even be interested in what you have to offer. You need to catch their attention from the start.

Answer 2

High impact personal statements--ones that go beyond mere formalities and actually increase your odds of admission--must weave some trenchant, personally-relevant philosophical or thematic abstraction through the personal factual anecdotes that alone comprise the overwhelming majority of essays. Be different. Be bold. Write impeccably. Don't tell them what you think they want to hear--every single applicant does this--tell them the interesting truth that is you..

Answer 3

Hello Sk k.

I would recommend attaching your essays to this post and other tutors will have a vote on which one is more effective.

You could also set up a lesson with a tutor to review your essays and pick the more effective one.