please help me to check my grammar

Question

Ra'ed and Wisam were arrested in prison. Sarah got another job in the T.G.I. Laith and Sarah Bagram occurred some. In one day she decided to begin in publishing their own broad. she has said she wants to publication for people who in same her age. Sarah was visiting Ra'ed and Wisam but Wisam never looked into Sarah's eyes. In the day Laith married Sarah. Sarah became pregnant with her baby girl. Sarah and Leith, they became worried about their daughter as the mother of Sarah was worry about her daughter Sarah. And thus it became Sarah lived a happy life.

Answer 1

Hi Shana,

Great job! It looks like you may want to work on your tenses. Additionally, I think you need to rephase what you mean in the second sentence ("occurred some"). Please see my corrections below.

Ra'ed and Wisam were arrested in prison. Sarah got another job in the T.G.I. Laith and Sarah Bagram occurred some (?). One day she decided to begin in publishing their own broad. she had said she wanted to publish for people who were in same her age group. Sarah was visiting Ra'ed and Wisam but Wisam never looked into Sarah's eyes. One day Laith married Sarah. Sarah became pregnant with their baby girl. Sarah and Leith, they became worried about their daughter as the mother of Sarah's mother was worried about her daughter Sarah. And thus it became Sarah lived a happy life.