PLS HELP ME WITH MY ESSAY? I HAVE COMPLETED IT JUST NEED SOMEBODY TO PROOFEAD AND MAKE CORRECTIONS/CHANGES? pls give suggestions for a strong thesis

Question

There's no denying that the Residential/Boarding School system left its mark on Indigenous communities in Canada, where intergenerational trauma and cultural erasure still exist. For decades, colonial perspectives dominated the story of these schools, silenced Indigenous voices, and distorted history. A residential/boarding school system was set up in Canada for the assimilation of Indigenous kids. Families were forcibly separated from their children and sent to schools run by the government and churches.

In history, Residential/Boarding Schools have been portrayed as benevolent houses that "civilized" Indigenous kids. Thousands of Indigenous children were abused and neglected, but such a narrative was suppressed. Indigenous communities and individuals have worked hard to reclaim their lives and challenge the dominant narrative in recent years. Through scholarship, activism, storytelling, and cultural revival, we've been able to see the true impact of Residential/Boarding Schools.

Cindy Blackstock's book gives a broad perspective into the abuses and long-lasting effects on indigenous communities in Suffer the Little Children: Genocide, Indigenous Nations, and the Canadian State. Bodies such as the Truth and Reconciliation Commission of Canada have tried to make public the trail of damages left in the wake of Residential/Boarding Schools and to pursue justice and redress on behalf of Survivors. Storytelling and cultural revival initiatives promote healing and resilience. Indigenous elders and knowledge holders have passed on their stories, legends, and culture to the younger generation for cultural continuity. Meaningful inclusion necessitates the recognition of Indigenous peoples as equals with inherent rights and dignity. This is crucial in education. Policy changes and government actions need to take into consideration the unresolved legacies of Residential/Boarding Schools. It is highly important that indigenous people take ownership of indigenous histories about the schools for their possible use in challenging colonialist conceptions of history. Reconciliation needs past acknowledgment, recognition of indigenous rights, and systemic inequalities.

The legacy of Residential/Boarding Schools continues to impact Indigenous communities today.

Healing and reconciliation require a collective action and commitment to justice. Their indigeneity has been the source of both resilience and determination, enabling the survival and prosperity of the communities despite several centuries of colonization. Moving forward requires recognition of past atrocities and acknowledgments of rights, adjustment of systemic inequalities. Reconciliation requires collective action and a commitment to justice. By prioritizing Indigenous perspectives and experiences, we can build a brighter future for all Canadians. Reclaiming the Indigenous narrative concerning Residential/Boarding Schools is a dire necessity rather than an option. As Canadians, we are obliged to confront the darker side of our history in the interest of reconciliation. Reclaiming Indigenous narratives about Residential/Boarding Schools is essential for healing, reconciliation, and justice. Education, activism, and policy can help us strive toward a future where diversity is valued, equity promoted, and Indigenous rights recognized.

By prioritizing Indigenous inclusion and reconciliation, a better future is being built for all Canadians. Ultimately, reconciliation takes action and commitment to justice. Reconciliation is not about "getting over" the past; it is about facing it head-on in collaboration for a better future. One powerful tool in challenging colonial understandings of history has been the reclamation of Indigenous narratives surrounding Residential/Boarding Schools.

Colonial narratives have dominated Canadian history, erasing Indigenous experiences and perspectives. Reclaiming Indigenous narratives requires challenging these dominant narratives. Indigenous scholars and activists have worked tirelessly to challenge colonial narratives. Decolonization requires recognizing Indigenous rights and self-determination. Education and awareness are critical components of decolonization, and community-based initiatives promote healing and reconciliation. Supporting Indigenous-led organizations and initiatives is essential to this process.

Government policies are to shift towards Indigenous rights and self-determination. Reconciliations are to be made through collective action and commitment to justice. Indigeneity had always resisted colonialism, but through the resistance and resilience, they had survived. To date, Indigenous people resist colonialism. The movement of land back initiatives works in returning Indigenous land; this needs self-determination for Indigenous Communities. Indigenous peoples have the right to self-govern. Reconciliation requires recognizing Indigenous self-determination, and the future of Indigenous-settler relations depends on this recognition.

Reconciliation demands common action and dedication to justice.

A brighter future can be built when Indigenous experiences and perspectives are brought to the fore. We can work together toward a more fair and equal society. Reconciliation is a journey-a path all Canadians must travel. We need to work together to address the legacy of Residential/Boarding Schools.

We have to center Indigenous voices and experiences. We must recognize the rights of Indigenous Peoples to self-determination. We must strive toward a future that values diversity and fosters equity. Now is the time for reconciliation. It is time to take action on behalf of the survivors of the Residential/Boarding Schools. Support local Indigenous-driven initiatives and organizations. Let your voice be heard in support of Indigenous inclusivity and reconciliation. Together we could build a brighter future for all Canadians.

Reconciliation has to be multilayered, from government policy and community-based initiatives to individual actions. Education systems need to include Indigenous histories, cultures, and perspectives. Curriculum development should focus on providing a voice and experiences from an Indigenous perspective, while teacher training needs to emphasize cultural sensitivity and awareness. Community-based initiatives should provide further support to Indigenous-led organizations and projects, while government policies must be directed toward systemic inequalities and Indigenous self-determination.

Land restitution and repatriation processes be Indigenous rights-led and informed. Economic development strategies aim at and for Indigenous-owned businesses. Health systems account for the specific needs concerning Indigenous peoples. Language and culture retention programmes provide support for Indigenous languages, and media representation outlines voice and views of Indigenous peoples. Accountability and redress are also parts of reconciliation. The Government of Canada should act on recommendations set out by the Truth and Reconciliation Commission, while provincial and territorial governments should follow suit. Corporations must be more cognizant of, and accountable for, their colonial roles. There needs to be an education by and about Indigenous peoples and their experiences. We need to listen to and amplify Indigenous voices. We must support Indigenous-led initiatives and organizations. Reconciliation is a practice, with action and commitment called for. Reconciliation asks us to confront our biases and privilege. It demands the centering of Indigenous rights and self-determination. It is together that we shall make a more equal world.

A society that values diversity and promotes equity.

A society recognizing Indigenous rights and self-determination. Now is the time for reconciliation; let us all work together toward a brighter future for all Canadians. Indigenous and non-Indigenous people must unite. We need to be there for the Indigenous perspectives and experiences. We are required to acknowledge the Indigenous rights, self-determination. Our struggle is for a future that values diversity and furthers equity. We can come together in building a better future. A future that honours Indigenous histories and cultures. A future that strives toward reconciliation and justice. Reconciliation would determine the fate of Indigenous-settler relations in the future. Let this be the day we take action. Let us build a brighter future for all Canadians.

ABOVE IS MY ESSAY!!!

Clearly introduces the event/narrative and its significance. Strong thesis.

Provides a thorough, well-researched description of how Indigenous voices were marginalized.

Detailed and insightful analysis of how Indigenous voices reclaimed their stories with strong examples.

Thoughtful reflection on the impact of reclaiming Indigenous narratives, connecting to broader societal issues.

Well-organized structure with clear transitions and focused arguments.

Virtually no errors in grammar, punctuation, or spelling.

Uses a wide range of reputable sources, including Indigenous perspectives. All sources properly cited.

PLEASE CHECK FOR THESE, THIS IS THE CRITERIA!!!!

Answer 1

I'd say you've done a fairly good job here, Sarah. One thing to note, however, is the importance of paragraph flow and concluding sentences. For example, the last two sentences in your introductory paragraph don't advance the argument or lead effectively into the second paragraph. Let's cut those for the sake of clarity. There are also several other points where this becomes an issue. We have a single-sentence paragraph towards the end of the essay. A stand-alone sentence isn't wrong in and of itself, but it's not common in academic work.