Does this make sense

Question

1. I think that the authorities shouldn't have a big connection between the two, they just need a probable cause, because it is better to be safe than sorry. Although not all people who are suspects are part of a group, even then they should still collect data on them just in case. For example if the suspect is saying they are going to do a school shooting and takes pictures of guns and other weapons that are dangerous they should collect data and surveil the suspect because they have probable cause.  

2. It would matter to me if the suspect was a US citizen because it would cause a lack of faith in the US, xenophobia, fear, and it would put people in danger. For example people would be in danger at school, stores, airplanes, buses, and trains.Terrorism causes the public's sense of security to be lost.

Answer 1

Hey Nathan, I've rewritten them hopefully a bit better a clearer for you:

1. I think that the authorities need probable cause to make an arrest, search or seizure, or reasonable suspicion that a crime is about to be committed. Although not all people who are suspects are part of a group with malicious intent, I think authorities should still collect data on them. For example, if the suspect is planning a school shooting, taking pictures of guns and other weapons, and posting to social media, the authorities should surveil the suspect because, in this case, they have probable cause.

2. I think it matters if the suspect is a U.S. citizen because non-citizens may cause xenophobia and fear for law-abiding citizens. For example, students may be in danger at school, folks in danger at stores, on airplanes, buses, and even trains. Terrorism tends to cause a sense of security among the populace to be lost.

Answer 2

Hi Nathan,

If you are asking as to whether or not the above two paragraphs make sense grammatically, I have made the following revisions as they pertain to your overall sentence structure within your writing in that regard:

1. I think that the authorities shouldn't have a big connection between the two. They just need a probable cause because it is better to be safe than sorry. Although not all people who are suspects are part of a group, the authorities should still collect data on them just in case. For example: if the suspect is saying they are going to do a school shooting and takes pictures of guns and other weapons that are dangerous, the authorities should collect data and surveil the suspect because they have probable cause.  

2. It would matter to me if the suspect was a US citizen because it would cause a lack of faith in the US, xenophobia, fear, and put people in danger. For example: people would be in danger at school, in stores, and on airplanes, buses, and trains. Terrorism causes the public's sense of security to be lost.