Spanish project

Question

Hello, I have a Spanish project due Sunday. It's all about me convincing my friend to visit my school. Can someone make sure my paragraph is fluent in Spanish and send back the translated version. Just translate it. You can change some words if it doesn't make sense. But, don't use google translate.

Dear, William

Hello, would you like to come to visit my fantastic school? This school is centered around engineering. My wonderful school is located in Red Bank, on Wood Street. This school has a great landscape and even better students. We have had some great celebrities. Including, Mike Tyson. We have great teachers here at Woodshop Academy. The whole school was made up of wood. We receive tons of scrap wood from local sawmills. These materials are put to good use with our students. However, we also give math lessons here too. All of our classes are great, the teachers work 24/7 every day of the week to provide for the students, even though school only takes from Monday to Friday. 

Sincerely, --------

Answer 1

Hello!

If you want a more accurate translation that sounds like a native speaker, you need to start thinking in the language you want to translate to. It is not only about the translation, it is about the interpretation.

Here is the text, good luck with your project!

I changed some words in order tomake it sound more "native" because we, in spanish, don't use words like "fantastic" or "great" as often as they are used in english langauage.

There is a phrase really hard to translate This school has a great landscape and even better students.

because they are not connected, you can't compare people to a landscape, so I suggest you work on that by comparing the landscape to the classrooms or other structures from the school.

Querido William:

¿Te gustaría venir a visitar mi escuela? Esta escuela se centra en la ingeniería. Mi escuela se encuentra en Red Bank, en la calle Wood. Esta escuela tiene un jardín grandioso y aún mejores estudiantes. Hemos tenido grandes celebridades, incluyendo Mike Tyson. Tenemos excelentes profesores aquí en Woodshop Academy. El colegio entero está construido en madera. Recibimos montones de sobras de madera de aserraderos locales. A estos materiales les damos buen uso con nuestros estudiantes. Sin embargo, aquí también damos lecciones de matemáticas. Todas nuestras clases son maravillosas, los maestros están disponibles 24/7 para los estudiantes, a pesar que la escuela solo ofrece clases de lunes a viernes.

Atentamente, ------------------

Dear, William

Hello, would you like to come to visit my fantastic school? This school is centered around engineering. My wonderful school is located in Red Bank, on Wood Street. This school has a great landscape and even better students. We have had some great celebrities. Including, Mike Tyson. We have great teachers here at Woodshop Academy. The whole school was made up of wood. We receive tons of scrap wood from local sawmills. These materials are put to good use with our students. However, we also give math lessons here too. All of our classes are great, the teachers work 24/7 every day of the week to provide for the students, even though school only takes from Monday to Friday. 

Sincerely, --------

Answer 2

I know I'm sending you the answer too late, but just another point of view about translation. Be careful with the tenses (the whole school "was made" = Toda la escuela "fue hecha")

Hola, te gutaría venir a visitar mi fantástica escuela? Esta escuela se centra en ingeniería. Mi maravillosa escuela se encuentra ubicada en Red Bank, en Wood Street. Esta escuela tiene un gran paisaje y estudiantes aún mejores. Hemos tenido algunas celebridades, incluyendo Mike Tyson. Tenemos grandes maestros aquí en Woodshop Academy. Toda la escuela fue hecha de madera. Recibimos toneladas de restos de madera de aserraderos locales. Estos materiales reciben un buen uso por nuestros estudiantes. Sin embargo, también damos lecciones de matemáticas aquí. Todas nuestras clases son geniales, los profesores trabajan 24/7 todos los días de la semana para mantener a los estudiantes, aunque la escuela solo se toma de lunes a viernes. 

Cordialmente,

Answer 3

Hi, here is a more realistic approach to the translation of this text (that also follows grammar rules):

Querido William,

Hola, ¿quisieras venir a visitar mi fantástica escuela? La escuela es enfocada hacia las ingenierías. Mi magnífica escuela se encuentra en Red Bank, en Wood Street. Esta escuela tiene un paisaje hermoso y aún mejores alumnos. Hemos tenido algunos increíbles celebridades; incluyendo a Mike Tyson. Tenemos profesores excelentes en la Academia de Carpintería. Toda la escuela está hecha de madera. Nosotros recibimos toneladas de madera de sobra, proveniente del aserradero. Estos materiales son dados un buen uso con nuestros alumnos, aunque también tenemos clases de matemáticas. Todas nuesras clases son muy buenas; los maestros trabajan 24/7, cada día de la semana para proverle a los alumnos, aunque la escuela sólo abre de lunes a viernes.

Saludos,

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Answer 4

Here you go Conor, that is a fluent response.

Querido William,

Hola, quisieras visitar a mi colegio fantastico? El colegio se centra en la ingenieria. Mi colegio maravilloso esta ubicado en Red Bank, en Wood Street. Este colegio tiene un gran paisaje y incluso mejores estudiantes. Hemos tenido algunos grandes famosos. Incluido, Mike Tyson. Tenemos profesores geniales aqui en Woodshop Academy. Todo el colegio estaba hecho de madera. Recibimos bastante madera de la chatarra de los aserraderos locales. Estos materiales mantienen bien usados gracias a los estudiantes. Pero, tambien damos lecciones de matematicas aqui. Todas nuestras clases son geniales, los profesores trabajan 24/7 cada dia de la semana para dar a los estudiantes, aunque el colegio solo toma de lunes a viernes.

Sinceramente,

Answer 5

Good morning, William:

Concerning your request to translate the following, Google Translate is excellent, but imperfect, so perfecting what it translates saves one labor.

Interestingly, but not surprisingly, your original text has many flaws. To a writing teacher like I, they scream.

Hello, would you like to come to visit my fantastic school? This school is centered around engineering. [ Merge those two sentences into one ( " my fantastic school centered on engineering? " ).

My wonderful school [ Write: "It ", you said it was "fantastic", you need not say "wonderful", that is redundant ] is located in Red Bank, on Wood Street [ write the street first ( go from small to large ) ] . This school [ delete "This school" , merge: "Red Bank, " and "has a great landscape and even better students" by writing:

It is located in on Wood Street in Red Bank, has a great landscape and excellent students. [ connecting a landscape to students is not good, those two are unrelated ].

YOU GET THE IDEA.

Best,

Charlie F.

. We have had some great celebrities. Including, Mike Tyson. We have great teachers here at Woodshop Academy. The whole school was made up of wood. We receive tons of scrap wood from local sawmills. These materials are put to good use with our students. However, we also give math lessons here too. All of our classes are great, the teachers work 24/7 every day of the week to provide for the students, even though school only takes from Monday to Friday. 

Sincerely, --------