Edit and rewrite the following sentence to eliminate any empty words, wordiness, or redundancy.

Question

People now have more than a twenty minute warning of a tornado now that England has persuaded Channel 9 to invest in Doppler radar.

Answer 1

Before: People now have more than a twenty minute warning of a tornado now that England has persuaded Channel 9 to invest in Doppler radar.

After: Since England has persuaded Channel 9 to invest in Doppler radar, people have a tornado warning of approximately twenty minutes.

Changing the word order can often fix an awkward sentence. Deciding what comes first and goes at the end is very important.

Answer 2

Now that England has persuaded Channel 9 to invest in Doppler radar people have at least a twenty minute warning for incoming tornados.