Diana L. answered 04/29/20
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I'd want to rewrite the sentence to make it shorter and simpler--and easier to understand. Here's my stab at it:
"Lydia tries not to think about the words she can never say."
Because I left out the original's monsters and voids, my version is less dramatic. But those figurative phrases don't work for me. What's a "sudden monster"? And a "void" is an absence, which doesn't fit the picture of a person burdened with the words she can't say.