What's wrong with "We hope you will find our Qualifications to be well-organized, concise, and most of all, to exceed your expectations."?

Question

Why is the following sentence grammatically incorrect?> We hope you will find our Qualifications to be well-organized, concise, and most of all, to exceed your expectations.I've asked three grammar whiz friends and they have all told me "it just isn't right." I need reasons and rules! I wrote this sentence as a closing to a cover letter....

Answer 1

First you have to understand that qualifications should not have a capita letter because it is in the middle of a sentence. A capital letter in the middle of a sentence is only appropriate for proper nouns. Additionally, you have mixed adjectives and infinitives to be equal. well-organized and concise are adjectives, while to excel your expectations is an infinitive. As such most of all simply does not fit into the sentence ad should be deleted.