Multiple 'as' (subordinate conjunction) in the same sentence?

Question

> Performance is poor as losses have increased and are projected to remain negative going forward as the company works through problem assets and realizes related expense. Is this sentence correct? If not, why? I couldn't find much on the internet in regards to utilizing multiple "because", multiple "as" or multiple subordinate conjunctions in general but I feel that this sentence is a bit "off".

Answer 1

It is technically correct, though it does seem a bit long, especially since there is no punctuation separating the different parts of the sentence. I would use a semicolon in place of the first "as," try to make the sentence structure more parallel, delete "going forward," " add an "s" to "expense," and maybe replace "works through problem assets" with something more specific.

Here is how I would reword your sentence. If the specific terminology isn't quite correct, I apologize--I'm not very familiar with business jargon--though I hope the structural changes help point you in the right direction.

"Performance is poor; profits have been increasingly negative and are projected to remain so as the company identifies problem assets and realizes related expenses."