check my grammar please help me

Question

Lina was spent a lot of time, accompanied by Daniel. In one day her parents asked her to meet Daniel, Lina was happy because she thought that her parents would allow her to spend time with Daniel. But her parents they decided to send her to Iraq later. Lina sent to Virginia to spend time with her friend, her name was Loome. In one day her father calls her to tell her that Daniel was arrested.Lina was confused about Daniel. Lina was preparing to leave for Iraq, and she was worried but Loome told her to not worry.

Answer 1

"In one day" is not proper grammar.  It's just "One day."  The "they" in the third sentence is not necessary.  You also need to work on the tone of the sentence.  You combine the present tone with the past tone.  "her father calls her to tell her that Daniel was arrested."  "Calls" is present tense.  "Was arrested" is past tense.  You also have a comma splice with your fourth sentence, "Lina sent to Virginia to spend time with her friend, her name was Loome."  In this case, you can use both parts of the sentence as a single sentence each and they'd work.  In this case use a semicolon (;).  You also need to note where to put in the word "was"  "Lina sent to Virginia..."  It should be "Lina was sent to Virgina..."  Also be sure to put spaces between the period and the next sentence.  Also, don't start a sentence with the word, "But."  But is supposed to be a sentence combiner, not a starter.

 

For easier reference it should look like this:

 

Lina spent a lot of time accompanied by Daniel.  One day, her parents asked her to meet Daniel.  Lina was happy because she thought that her parents would allow her to spend time with him, but her parents later decided to send her to Iraq.  Lina was sent to Virginia to spend time with her friend; her name was Loome.  One day her father called her to tell her that Daniel was arrested.  Lina was confused about Daniel.  She was preparing to leave for Iraq and she was worried but Loome told her to not worry.